Oort-Cloud - Comments

Again, enjoying the details

Richard Adler — Thu, 09 Sep 2010 07:34:23 -0700

Again, enjoying the details your adding to the story. Here, the description of the houses, and Stalkforth's piece of jewelry.

Curious to see where the story goes next. Why Stalkforth is lying where he is when they find him. What exactly they want from him, etc. Looking forward to finding out!

Just goes to show, no matter

Richard Adler — Thu, 09 Sep 2010 07:29:42 -0700

Just goes to show, no matter how splashy you make your entrance, there's always going to be somebody around who won't be impressed by it!

I thought the details you picked to describe the landing (the leaves, the sprays of water, etc.) were well-chosen. They help to make the scene concrete and vivid.

You know, a separate post is

Richard Adler — Thu, 02 Sep 2010 19:00:22 -0700

You know, a separate post is an even better idea.

Allow me.

polishing

sim — Thu, 02 Sep 2010 15:32:19 -0700

It's hard to just post something, just jot something down, something off-the-cuff first-drafty that's for public consumption.

As for ideas for oort-cloud: you want a separate thread or whut?

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Right-o

sim — Thu, 02 Sep 2010 15:11:18 -0700

Indeed. I can only imagine the beating some have endured. Yet, here we are. Sometimes, just showing up counts as a win.

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"Hard pounding this, gentlemen. Let's see who will pound the longest." --The Duke of Wellington.

Argh, that does sting a bit.

Richard Adler — Wed, 01 Sep 2010 22:23:15 -0700

Argh, that does sting a bit. But I think you're right that the best response is to take it as an opportunity.

Paul and I have had some ideas about how to give the site a freshening up, and we'd also love to hear any ideas you guys have about improvements we could make around here. We'll be glad to make them happen if we can.

In any case, thanks for defending our collective honor!

And, come to think of it, I *do* have a couple pieces lying around that could use some polishing....

well...

klc — Wed, 01 Sep 2010 19:46:44 -0700

I think we're a bit better than that, but hey, I've been through some sh*t in the past year.

my reply on /.

sim — Wed, 01 Sep 2010 16:46:08 -0700

I can't remember my /. password and that email account is long gone, so I posted as an Anonymous Coward. Here's my reply:

Oort-Cloud is an experiment, one that is currently senescent. I understand you are disappointed in the site, but as an OC contributor, I hope you realize that the result of an experiment depends on the variables you mix together. I think the OC still holds the promise for interesting results.

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one minor nit

klc — Sat, 24 Apr 2010 14:51:38 -0700

I would advise against using 'quietly' and 'quiet' in the same sentence.

Waiting for the next installment...

Thank you. I am humbled, truly.

klc — Tue, 06 Apr 2010 09:02:40 -0700

I am grateful that it works well enough without the previous seven chapters of backstory. It was something I was doing in part to keep her spirits up.

These stories have been very important to my development as a writer. As time goes by, a number of ideas that have been floating around in my personal 'oort-cloud' (some for decades now) are beginning to exert gravitational influence on one another. I do still remain curious about where it's all going.

Now I can tell a story with a beginning, middle, and an end in less than 7k words. I've learned that a short story has to hustle. Which lets me justify a minimalist style of writing. ; ) Reading 'The Writer's Journey' by Christopher Vogler helped me get a better understanding of some of the deeper concepts I'm working with, and provided a rough framework for these bits.

The two Guys meeting bit is a retelling of a tale from my martial arts master. Two samurai dueled for a day and a night without ever striking a blow, because every move each one made showed the other that their skills were equal.

I overlooked the fact that the web page doesn't like three line breaks until it was too late. I hope the changes in tense and POV weren't too confusing.

Kevin, I loved this story.

Richard Adler — Mon, 05 Apr 2010 22:59:03 -0700

Kevin, I loved this story. In fact, I think it's your best yet. But very hard to hear the story behind the story. I can't imagine how difficult the past year must have been, but I hope posting here has helped at least a little.

Guy seems like a perfect character for a series of stories. It's a great premise for that. The one who saves the world (or the universe) time and again, but at a heavy cost that he ends up shouldering because.... well, sometimes it's hard to say.

My favorite part was the two Guys meeting. Great awkward moment, but between two very smart beings, so nothing stupid gets done, and they figure things out like the way Guys ought to. Very nicely done.

Off to quite a start. Would

Richard Adler — Fri, 02 Apr 2010 19:50:35 -0700

Off to quite a start. Would I be right to guess this one isn't going to be all about sunshine and rainbows? :)

Good Luck

sim — Sun, 17 Jan 2010 14:31:53 -0800

You have my best wishes. I am so sorry for your loss. Good luck.

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Hahahha...thanks. Somebody

kelson.philo — Sun, 20 Dec 2009 22:27:05 -0800

Hahahha...thanks. Somebody stop this record's skipping...